(Test 2) You have a disease, and you need to run away from help.

You are someone in their mid teens who has been diagnosed with a dangerous disease. but the one thing more painful then the disease, is that it hurts your family too. So your on the run in Ethereal to find a cure, and you’re going to stay away from those you love most or die trying. (This is my first scenario and I’m not good whatsoever and the test of the scenario didn’t end up how I wanted. It’s not professional and if you have advice on how to fix it, please give it) Update, I’ve fixed a few things, however the start is still a little wonky. However it’s still been upgraded to test two. I’ve made some of the characters work a little better, and updated the starting point. I’d still like advice in the comments to help me work to making the final version, even if it never gets much attention. I still don’t know how to make this style of scenario allow you to put in your appearance, so if you know please share. Also introducing the player seems to always go wrong, so I suggest reading through the first part before editing the last part to fit the setting, your not supposed to be meeting with anyone when you first start. Feel free to mess with any of the settings to improve your own experience, though if you find a serious bug and know how to fix it, tell me so I can fix it for everyone.